Considering the severity of this problem， it is high time that we started adopting effective measures. First, it is imperative for the government to encourage youngsters to embark on self-employment and provide relevant preferential policies, thereby, young people still have huge room for employment even though they are eliminated by the job competition. Further, it works to invite senior job-seekers to act as consultants for the companies and provide symbolic remuneration. In this way, both parties could put their talents into full play. Wise and experienced job candidates can provide ambitious and vigorous youngsters with guidance. Finally, on the part of the elderly, what is of the utmost importance is to adjust their mentalities, by that I mean, to enjoy the retirement life and seek other pleasure is more commendable for them. Instead of competing for the limited job vacancies, to smell the flowers is a win-win option both for the aged and the young.

解析：Considering the severity of this problem， it is high time that we started adopting effective measures. 考虑到问题的严重性，是我们采取有效的措施来解决问题的时候了。

解析：to encourage youngsters to embark on self-employment and provide relevant preferential polices 鼓励年轻人自我创业，并且提供相关的优惠政策。

解析：provide symbolic remuneration v 提供象征性的薪酬

解析：put their talents into full play v充分展示才华

解析：on the part of sb 对于某人而言

解析：what is of the utmost importance is to …… 真正重要的是去……

解析：by that I mean 我的意思是……

解析：is more commendable for them 对于他们而言更加值得赞美

解析：job vacancies n工作岗位

解析：to smell the flowers v偷得浮生半日闲

解析：a win-win option n 双赢的选择

尾段： 亮明观点 (时间不足，现场省略)

Overall，it is not an easy task to appropriately balance the job needs between the young and the old. Every method I have method has its unique merit，therefore，joint efforts should be made by the government，relevant enterprises and the individual job-hunters.

解析：Every method I have method has its unique merit，therefore，joint efforts should be made by ……，……，…… 我提及的方法都有其利好，因此，……，……，……应该共同努力

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