It is rather superficial to simply believe that the cell phone should be restricted. Seen from the positive aspects，many benefits could be gained by making use of the mobile phone. The most obvious merit is that it can bring huge convenience to people’s communication. For example, if a teenage girl misses the last bus, she can ring her parents to come and get her back. Another advantage coming from the mobile phone is that bus passengers could simply use their cell phones to kill time by reading the latest current events or playing phone games. Last, the cell phone could perfectly play the role of educator. For example, I like to take part in some on-line training courses or listen to some interesting lectures by my phone.

　　解析：It is rather superficial to simply believe that …… 简单认为……很肤浅

　　解析：could perfectly play the role of educator ……可以完扮演教育者角色

　　尾段：再次亮明观点+ 总结理由

　　In closing, my view is that to completely ban the use of the mobile is impractical. The mobile phone is double-edged weapon, which is can used for equally good or evil. What is of the great importance is to make use of its benefits and be watchful about its possible demerits.

　　拓展：use = make use of = take advantage of = harness = utilize = draw on v 利用……

　　解析：…… is double-edged weapon, which is can used for equally good or evil 是一把双刃刀，有利有弊。

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